AlmightyHans's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[ZombieMurderExplosionDie]

It's okay, but I think it could be better...

In a world like ours, where zombies are literally taking over every medium and art form, this is not original, but that's not the problem. The art and animation is great and I can see you put a lot of time and effort into it and it paid off.

But there is something I would like to stress and not out of hate but out of love for young animators trying to get their shows... and this is what I have to say:

"Voice actors, DON'T DELIVER ONE LINERS LIKE THEY'RE ONE LINERS" I'm not saying this to sound snobby, but really, delivery is everything in your jokes. If the voice actors can't deliver it it ruins a perfectly good moment. It is SO easy to make a laugh turn into a cringe. Trust me I know. I've failed to deliver many lines and at the time, maybe they seemed like they worked for whatever meaning and backstory those lines were, but months later if i watched it again and had a more fresh perspective i realized how flat and dull i had done.

again i intend no hate, but i do see this happening in this cartoon. The characters deliver their lines like they have already heard the joke before and are merely reminding people what the joke is. that tone has a detachment that hurts the humor.

Alright i'll shut up now, but I just wanted to throw that out there for you. Because I see this happening a lot. Humor doesn't just come from what is said, in fact most importantly it's how it's said.

[The Northern Incident]

That was amazing.

*SPOILERS*

A very beautiful and well crafted short. But all spoiled by such a stupid punchline. I mean, I'm not against the false setup for a funny joke. but a furry joke? seriously?

I dunno, was weak. I felt you could have concluded it better. And your whole movie depended on your conclusion. it was all build up.

[Swimmin with the Sharks]

This was fucking hilarious!

I'd say this is my favorite voice acting tomar's done! i really liked the variety you put in it voice wise, and the animation was simple and very effective as usual Arin. GREAT JOB ON THE MUSIC CHRIS! I like the one shark that has no facial features. just a normal shark.

[The Last Man on Earth]

Merry Christmas

The last man on earth doesnt have to read the same paper every day.... if he makes a new one. The last man on earth can spend christmas without his family, but he can remember the good 'ol days with them....

jesus guys! be positive! it's christmas!

that was really good, just a 9 cause i feel the audio could have been clearer.

Dunso responds:

Thanks man, I'm a complete audio noob :P

[SuperVillain V]

Aw, christ.

I'm tired of this. Every moment holds for two seconds before it starts, and holds for two seconds after it ends. Just because it's drawn on paper doesn't make it okay, or stylish. The pacing of this video is like grandma hitting hard on the breaks after every few feet of driving at 4 miles and hour.

I love your style. That I'll give you, but you've been relying on the fact that you do it on paper for too long. To the point where you haven't developed your sense of timing.

[Circle n' Square 2]

props dude.

that was absolutely genius.

[Run Baby Horse!]

I think newgrounds needs to remember...

that not every damn thing on this site needs to be a short cartoon. Don't criticize an experimental walk cycle like you would a short. the idea of submitting a cartoon to newgrounds is to get feedback on your work. not just entertain you.

anyway aside from that I think the animation is very nice and fluid, my personal favorite aspect of this running cycle is the style and approach you took to coloring it. you really captured that velvety feel horse skin has. it's very nice.

I only voted this a 9 cause i think the head doesn't move quite as good as the rest of its body.

['Rageous 7]

That was very well put together.

I have to say thats the best collab i've seen in a long time. It was refreshing to see a good one again. really really awesome.

[A Robo Western]

really awesome

That was incredibly well pieced together. Very nice visuals. Polished art, smooth animation, and good story. Although, (take this with a grain of salt) but i feel some of the seqences could have used a bit of intensification, the dialog a bit of revision, and the story a couple of tweaks.

on little things.

For example, for intensification, on the final battle when the main sheriff character pulls out the big gun and fired. have some camera angels of the bad guys firing at will in panic showing him trying to shoot it. not just bullets ricocheting off the missile. otherwise we're too detached from the villains suffering, loosing the value of pay-off for the audience were we finally see this over-powering villain loosing. also, if you punched up the volume on the sound effects for some of those action sequences would have helped ;D

As for the dialog, one example is when the sheriff discovers the town. don't have him talk to himself out loud, wondering what happened when he's about to find out when talking to the wounded ex-sheriff. First off, it's stronger if you show, don't tell. like maybe having an extreme close u to hollowed out eyes of dead robo-townspeople. second, it's weird and a big cheesy hearing characters talk to themselves like that, another subtle detachment from the audience. but still counts. (side note on dialog) it would of been cool if when the villain hears the sheriff come back at the ar instead of saying "let's fight" (i think thats what he said) would have been cool if he said something like "round...two..." meaning his second eye (round). ...But that's not really necessary, just woulda been cool ;)

thirdly, the story. it was a bit of a rushed strange solution having the ex-sheriff (defeated) give him the weapon that ended up killing the bad guy. especially something like that. Kind of makes me wonder why the ex-sheriff lost. Hell maybe you could have played off this strategy the villain had with ripping through other people's bullets. Maybe the ex sheriff could have said "he caught me by surprise with that strategy and blew up my missile, I was the one who destroyed the town". i dunno... so maybe the main character now knowing this bullet ripping strategy put the missile on smart mode, and dodged the bullets. All im saying is, that doesn't need the solution but it was a bit awkward of a solution in the placement of the story.

These aren't complaints, this movie was phenomenal, I just hope these tips are helpful because you are really good, and could be fucking astounding. Congratulations on your great piece of work! Hope this review provided good feedback!