A Robo Western really awesome
That was incredibly well pieced together. Very nice visuals. Polished art, smooth animation, and good story. Although, (take this with a grain of salt) but i feel some of the seqences could have used a bit of intensification, the dialog a bit of revision, and the story a couple of tweaks.
on little things.
For example, for intensification, on the final battle when the main sheriff character pulls out the big gun and fired. have some camera angels of the bad guys firing at will in panic showing him trying to shoot it. not just bullets ricocheting off the missile. otherwise we're too detached from the villains suffering, loosing the value of pay-off for the audience were we finally see this over-powering villain loosing. also, if you punched up the volume on the sound effects for some of those action sequences would have helped ;D
As for the dialog, one example is when the sheriff discovers the town. don't have him talk to himself out loud, wondering what happened when he's about to find out when talking to the wounded ex-sheriff. First off, it's stronger if you show, don't tell. like maybe having an extreme close u to hollowed out eyes of dead robo-townspeople. second, it's weird and a big cheesy hearing characters talk to themselves like that, another subtle detachment from the audience. but still counts. (side note on dialog) it would of been cool if when the villain hears the sheriff come back at the ar instead of saying "let's fight" (i think thats what he said) would have been cool if he said something like "round...two..." meaning his second eye (round). ...But that's not really necessary, just woulda been cool ;)
thirdly, the story. it was a bit of a rushed strange solution having the ex-sheriff (defeated) give him the weapon that ended up killing the bad guy. especially something like that. Kind of makes me wonder why the ex-sheriff lost. Hell maybe you could have played off this strategy the villain had with ripping through other people's bullets. Maybe the ex sheriff could have said "he caught me by surprise with that strategy and blew up my missile, I was the one who destroyed the town". i dunno... so maybe the main character now knowing this bullet ripping strategy put the missile on smart mode, and dodged the bullets. All im saying is, that doesn't need the solution but it was a bit awkward of a solution in the placement of the story.
These aren't complaints, this movie was phenomenal, I just hope these tips are helpful because you are really good, and could be fucking astounding. Congratulations on your great piece of work! Hope this review provided good feedback!
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